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[minervasolo]

I wrote poetry. I didn't set out, but the first two lines make far better poetry than prose.

She follows with unfocused eyes
the lazy paths of dragonflies;
the mazy walk beneath the trees;
the hazy winding bumblebees

Capitalisation and punctuation a strange and deliberate choise. Call it avant-garde. The most difficult thing about poetry for me is stopping; I could add another couple of lines to this off the top of my head, and probably write another verse, but I think it would be a worse poem for it.

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Comments

[apiphile.livejournal.com]

Five million billion points for "mazy" which does not get enough use, srs.

[minervasolo.livejournal.com]

I love mazy. I've only seen it once in published fiction that I remember (well, genre fiction), though it did rather stand out in a purple-prosy kind of way. Careful, or poetical, use only, I suspect.

I didn't actually realise 'til I went back to edit this (work: thrilling) that I'd got the '-azy' thing going, and was quite pleased with that.

[apiphile.livejournal.com]

Mmm, I've seen it in a couple of things, usually older books, and I'm rather fond of it as a word. It has a summer feel to it.

Wow, unconscious rhyme scheme!

[desticex.livejournal.com]

WHY HELLO THERE! : D

[mooetta.livejournal.com]

I like that, especially the rhythm and all the z's which evoke the sound of the insects (and I agree that 'mazy' is an awesome word).