A little input please!

[minervasolo]

I've just signed up for yet another fic exchange. Fortunately, this one doesn't begin until ater teh current one ends, and since I'm 80% of the way through hte fic for that it should be fine.

Anyway, I'm about two thrids of the way through the halloween 'London Eats people' story for Diorama. Basic plot is just train falls down big hole. Big hole is actually mouth, but never made overly explicit. Train company may possibly know it is in fact mouth, but want to cover it up really fast so they can run trains again (and rpetend it never happened). Three survivors or train crash trapped and die. If I had a paid livejournal, the following would be a poll. As it is, just help, okay?

Should I (a) Have one character (Dick) climb to the top of the pit, find it just being covered over, plummet to his death and leave the other two unaware that he didn't just climb out and abandon them; or (b) have all three characters climb up and find it covered over just as they arrive, and be stuck banging on the covering; or (c) do something else entirely, possibly including zombies.

Please, input. I'm stuck at a crossroads and I need help deciding.

Comments

[thornsilver]

I like the first one better. Especially if the reader does not find out about what really happened to that first character until the very end of the story.

[minervasolo.livejournal.com]

sounds like (a) it is! Thanks

[almighty-frog.livejournal.com]

I like option A, but option C appeals as well - particularly if there can be zombies down this gullet which pick them off and eat them one by one. ::cackles::

[minervasolo.livejournal.com]

I think we're going for a, it seems. I'll just have to write something else with zombies, i suppose!

*ponders*

[misura.livejournal.com]

Well, I guess it depends on the kind of mood you aim for. Option (b) sounds like something in the style of H.P. Lovecraft (without the magical tome or monster); depressing yet realistic. Option (a) sounds tragic, more psychological, while option (c) sounds most Halloweeny to me.

I mean, come on! What's a Halloween-fic without zombies? ~.^ Though you'd have to come up with a reason for those zombies existing in that place, of course.

Re: *ponders*

[minervasolo.livejournal.com]

the presence of zombies would be odd, but zombies are fun. I've got to think about length as well, that's hte problem. I suspect it's already way too long, so we may not be able to fit zombies at all. sigh.

I'm leaning towards (a) right now, since Dick is teh kind of character who actually would leave the girls to die once he'd established he couldn't sleep with them anyway.

*feels snarky*

[misura.livejournal.com]

Dick is the kind of character who actually would leave the girls to die once he'd established he couldn't sleep with them anyway.

In that case, I'd say he's aptly named. ^^;

Re: *feels snarky*

[minervasolo.livejournal.com]

Indeed. He was just Richard, then I thoughm 'hey, he's a bastard' and the nickname appeared. Of course, he thinks it's a compliment from the lay-dees.